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[ReamusLQ]

Niiiiice work Freefreddy. I always love hearing other people's musical creations. You have a really nice melodic line running through out the piece. The first few beats actually reminded me of the marimba part I played for the opener of our last field show. You've also created a really cool ostinato effect with that opening running line. This would actually sound really sweet for a mallet arrangement (marimba, vibraphone, and bells would be a sick set up.) I really dig the modulation of the melody that occurs around 1:11. It keeps the piece interesting. How many running lines do you have total in this piece? I think by the end I counted three or four lines having run simultaneously. The only thing I would change, would be the ending of the piece. You have it set up for a nice cadence, but you add the last arpeggio in there, causing it to seem a little unfinished. I would continue the ritard and instead of having the last arpeggio ascend, have it descend so that the E minor chord (it is e minor right?) ends in a lower register. I would suggest playing the first two notes of the final arpeggio, but instead of completing the triad, go from the G to the F#, down to the D, then UP to the E and add the B G E below it. That is just my personal preference though, and I apologize if the above doesn't make much sense. I get carried away sometimes, and I actually had to refrain from using some terms But over all, amazing job man. I'll share some of my stuff with you once I figure out how to get Finale to save the music to sound like something other than piano.

Edit: Or you could do much simplar than my above suggestions, and final E in the arpeggio, but an E either one or two octaves below it to give it a more rich feeling ending, and it also adds some...what's the word...well, it's a stronger resolution. Make it subtle, but it would sound nice in there.