This song was done a while ago (long before Happy Feet) for a multimedia book, Ocean Fairies - a fantasy about fairy pengiuns. (fairy penguins are a real species of penguin, the smallest one.) I'm revamping the whole project and I've noticed the music doesn't quite work. Something is wrong with the phrasing or the structure of the songs. This one is quite bad, I think. I can't work out what is wrong, exactly. Is the music too crammed without enough breathing spaces? Is the rhythm wrong, or the phrasing? Can anyone give me an idea of how I might fix this problem? Would really appreciate any input.

The song, Ocean Fairies, is in mp3 format and only 4 meg.

http://uploadhut.com/view.php/352008.mp3

Hopefully the above url works for download. The special forum code isn't accepted by the forum. Something about dynamic coding.

Thanks! :)

Edit:

It works. You just have to right click and select 'save target as' on the line where it says to do just this.

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my first impression is that it's too fast.

too fast changing of the instruments.

but I'm no expert.

Yes, I think you're right, Data. Something like that. I did the song ages ago, and others like it, but suddenly I can hear something's not right, which is good as I can improve it.

Thanks :)